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The Force is Strong With This One
whitecoast said:I am somewhat skeptical that this woman is the first person to let the black-eyed children inside. To me this has the hallmarks of horror fiction writing: nearly everything she mentions in itself is a kind of red flag, but she still stumbles toward the proverbial swamp thing anyway. Notice how suspense is paced and built up over the course of the writing as well. That at least is my opinion.
Honestly, since I was reading this for the first time and translating this to a friend to see if both of us would be creeped out by it I failed to notice that it is really well made as a story. I also tend to get "into" stories and dissociate easily when exposed to one so thank you for noticing.
I don't necessarily think that his specific aspect of it is what makes it not credible, but certainly the lack of verifiable evidence in this case means we can't give lots of credibility to it.